Improved Design for my Illustration Board

You may have seen in a previous post I have to complete and illustration board showing my dress for the current brief.  I had completed one design showing my idea and after some advice from my tutor I have improved upon this design.

I feel I have been able to make the hair stronger and look more effective also I have tried to make the body in proportion with the head as it wasn't in my first design.

I am more confident with this illustration and feel that I am now ready to apply it to my mount board.

What do you think?